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    dots Submission Name: The Darknessdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Passion
    Total Views: 555
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 790



    Description:
       how i'm feeling right now withdrawlin from everyone


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    dotsThe Darknessdots
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    Outside the sun shines down upon us all
    Feeling its heat beating off your skin you can
    Yet my heart is cold
    Dark and gloomy it is, and for the foreseeable future will forever be a miserable place
    Spiraling downward I am
    Looking searching,
    Desperately trying to crawl my way out I have been
    Yet my attempts are pointless
    My efforts are fruitless
    Only becoming more and more engorged within this black hole
    Known as my soul, my heart.
    A bunker I keep hidden from them all
    This place I seem to always retreat to lonely and cold
    Forever I'll be its puppet always longing to run to when things go astray
    Then again I cannot stand to be within, consumed by its darkness and depression




    Submitted on 2011-03-17 15:15:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      As i read this i felt as if you have heard me talk for hours and hours and decided to write about it...i can definately realte to this and i totally understand what you are going through..i am very glad you submitted this...now i know im not crazy thank u for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-03-18 00:00:00 | by unwantedlove20 | [ Reply to This ]


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