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    dots Submission Name: Thirstdots
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    Author: Kersofmia
    ASL Info:    23/m/NY
    Elite Ratio:    5.48 - 116/89/50
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 406
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    Bytes: 841



    Description:
       I was shot twice just a little over 6 months ago... Open heart surgery, a piece of my lung removed, two spine fractures, and a titanium plate attached to my jaw. I know this isn't much of a poem but while I was in the hospital I kept thinking about writing again and since haven't been able to. So, I basically just opened up post and starting writing. I'm hoping this will get me back on track... it's a start at least :-)


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    dotsThirstdots
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    I bled to the last drop to be brought back for nothing but a memory.

    "Why me?"

    Searched the mountain tops of unconsciousness for an answer.

    "Is there reason?"

    Truly lost my self in the most profound depths of darkness in hopes to see a glimmer.

    "Where were you?"

    Deafened silence itself just to hear your voice.

    "Are you listening?"

    Tried to embrace forgiveness and understanding to make you proud.

    "Where is the light?"

    Collected all my courage to fight again and recover.

    "Can you guide me?"

    Reaching for the stars I beg to feel the touch of your hand.

    "How long do I wait?"




    Submitted on 2011-03-17 20:20:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      -Typed after reading the description, before piece.-

    I could not help but notice you said you were in the hospital and couldn't help thinking about getting back into the writing dynamism.
    That is very brawny of your character and who you are as a person to have a longing to want to re-enter the mindset for ultimate regain, with pace.
    And that there made me not want to turn away from what was below of the explanation for the work.

    -After reading.-

    For the account given here I would give way to the thought of near life ending experience or death clinching and that is there any resist in the situation.
    Is it one of those closer to God, slug burn sinking gradually into you kind of predicaments.

    Where life beams at you, reflecting key periods or parts of it.All in minutes.

    Just maybe by an inch, I have another deep thought rising as a giant during dusk.Just maybe.Related to the content and life focus.

    Which is resurgence, written over it.

    The thought of full recovery and life purpose through consideration all to you.

    Get well soon.Second chances must be answered.

    Rexsan
    | Posted on 2011-03-17 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      this is particularly moving...glad you are writing again...

    this has such depth...a true feel of survival and wondering why no help was at hand...

    i liked the questions...

    sure glad you survived...a voice we don't want to lose.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-03-17 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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