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    dots Submission Name: Break Awaydots
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    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 254
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 508
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1573



    Description:
       Just in ma head


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    Verse 1

    It’s getting harder every time
    Was it something that I did?
    Or didn’t do this time.
    Tell me how could this be true?
    Even though you see me smiling
    My life is painted blue.

    So I’ll go
    Where to I don’t know

    Chorus

    Waiting just to see a better day
    Some things are hard to ever change
    I can stay and hope forever
    That I won’t break away.
    Feeling like I have no place to run
    I will never say that this is fun
    I can hope it won’t last forever
    So I won’t break away.

    Verse 2

    I always thought that it was my time
    I sit and look how many years have come and pass me by
    You see there’s no need to feel crazy now
    There’s a difference between all the bad times
    And the good that’s here somehow

    I don’t know
    Which way I wanna go

    Chorus

    Waiting just to see a better day
    Some things are hard to ever change
    I can stay and hope forever
    That I won’t break away.
    Feeling like I have no place to run
    I will never say that this is fun
    I can hope it won’t last forever
    So I won’t break away.

    Bridge

    So I make some progress now
    I’m finding out what life’s about
    But I know that I can’t control whether things will go my way
    With no control it will happen anyway

    Chorus




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