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    dots Submission Name: Upon The Quill of Forever dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsUpon The Quill of Forever dots

    Where you live, beside the silence
    In those vowels and verbs of creation
    Which etch your blood with wishes

    You dare not speak, or open your heart
    Lest the pile driver of yourself
    Wake you up

    Ah ! pretty noun, pretty verse and colourful tries
    To say who you are
    To fall upon the echoes of an advert
    And devour its meaning
    Simply nothing
    Save you from this constant thinking

    And speak

    Search the gut wrenching tongue
    For something
    Which cuts itself and dances itself from your being

    A bland statue, edifice, monument and tomb
    Still you find as you warble
    Though the screaming clutch of yourself would have you
    In an agony utter something else

    But I; like a painted mist
    Ponder on concept
    And I am slapped by the intensity of sky
    And in such; how could I express, I
    Save to reach in every aching vein
    To put these words in calligraphy
    And there, see them remain, eternal

    PROOF !

    I said something once
    And as I spoke
    I wrote in eternity
    And in eternity
    My words

    Submitted on 2011-03-18 14:40:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice title, the feel of it though is lost on me oddly i love deep thoughts laid bare. But the vowels,words,pen paper- sounds like something I would like but I got lost in meanings per stanza and as a whole. But liked the proof segment at bottom was okay.
    Maybe I need more coffee.
    Please do keep writing.
    | Posted on 2011-03-22 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]

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