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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Look into my eyes

    an accidental kiss;

    cause memories weren't made to make this moment last forever

    and there's nothing you can do to turn back time

    And we're left shaking in a memory never meant



    Beautiful angelic doll,

    porcelain turned to flesh

    and an angel that left me for dead



    can you look into my eyes and see the fire?

    Every second lost fighting that desire...

    But tears weren't meant to hurt anyone;

    tears weren't meant to burn straight through the flesh.



    But your lies and games

    caused acid to fall from the sky

    You didn't mean to kill anyone.

    You didn't mean to fill me with so much hate.

    But angels don't belong to anyone

    And you don't belong to me.




    Submitted on 2011-03-18 18:19:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Retrospectively retroactive can be a devastating force aimed spiritual probity . It's like it didn't actually happen that way , but it should have . "a memory never meant" Angels will see it as they see it regardless of how that makes us feel . They're sword of vengeance is a contagious apparition . Perhaps it would be better not to seek an eye to eye understanding . But I blither , and I'm probably way off the mark . Oh well .

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2011-03-18 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      you killed my love for you with your games...

    we were like an accidental kiss, incidental contact...

    the taste of it still on my lips...but my eyes are dry...

    you are not my angel...you don't belong to anyone...and i am better off with just my own wings to fly solo...

    there is such intensity in this...but it is mixed with regret...like the speaker is sorry to feel so bitter...but has been pushed to the limits of patience...

    reminds me of when a friend of mine and i decided to try to date...we tried that goodnight kiss...and it was so awkward that we wished it had never happened...and it nearly broke up our friendship...

    no games in that situation...but the same regret as expressed here...she was an angel..but not my angel...

    glad to have come upon this write.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-03-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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