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"Shadows And Dust"


Author: Ron Cole
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"Shadows And Dust"



Do as you will
and do as you must
Man's earthly creations
are but shadows and dust.

Though he labors long
and he labors hard
and at eventide
he's weary and tired

he's worked not in vain
for on the skyline
are magnificent buildings
that are monuments in time.

But remember this
ye who labor and toil
the values that persist
are from heart and soul.

The riches that last
for eternity
are unselfish love
and sincerity.

For material things
finally crumble and rust
and earthly possessions
are but shadows and dust.




Submitted on 2011-03-19 07:50:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow.... the words could never be put in such more of a beautiful format... I love this peiace..

thanks for sharing
| Posted on 2011-05-25 00:00:00 | by janekostman09 | [ Reply to This ]
  A poem that tells a story of truth,
man builds with material alreadt old, so it is bound to fall apart and turn to dust and rust.

Well written, with thought givin to the subject, moreso than the vessal.
Time after time, my word won't ryhme,
yet never consider passing a line. LOL.
very good Ron, thank you.
| Posted on 2011-04-16 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
  How right your words are, Ron!
The most valuable and lasting works of man are those of the heart.
Love given and received will never rust away or be worn down by time; and a kind heart will not be forgotten.


Well done!
| Posted on 2011-04-02 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
  Ron, this poem has made my day.
| Posted on 2011-03-24 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
  Ron,
This is a very simplictic piece that reveals so must truth about people and their earthly possesions.

The only thing I really had an issue with was the rhyme scheme...in the 1st, 4th, 5th & 6th stanza you had an a,b,c,b going, but in the 2nd and 3rd there wasn't one at all...just found it a bit perplexing.

Thanks for the good read
~KimbreRain
| Posted on 2011-03-23 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]


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