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    dots Submission Name: "Shadows And Dust"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 2383/1715/240
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dots"Shadows And Dust"dots
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    Do as you will
    and do as you must
    Man's earthly creations
    are but shadows and dust.

    Though he labors long
    and he labors hard
    and at eventide
    he's weary and tired

    he's worked not in vain
    for on the skyline
    are magnificent buildings
    that are monuments in time.

    But remember this
    ye who labor and toil
    the values that persist
    are from heart and soul.

    The riches that last
    for eternity
    are unselfish love
    and sincerity.

    For material things
    finally crumble and rust
    and earthly possessions
    are but shadows and dust.




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      Wow.... the words could never be put in such more of a beautiful format... I love this peiace..

    thanks for sharing
    | Posted on 2011-05-25 00:00:00 | by janekostman09 | [ Reply to This ]
      A poem that tells a story of truth,
    man builds with material alreadt old, so it is bound to fall apart and turn to dust and rust.

    Well written, with thought givin to the subject, moreso than the vessal.
    Time after time, my word won't ryhme,
    yet never consider passing a line. LOL.
    very good Ron, thank you.
    | Posted on 2011-04-16 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      How right your words are, Ron!
    The most valuable and lasting works of man are those of the heart.
    Love given and received will never rust away or be worn down by time; and a kind heart will not be forgotten.


    Well done!
    | Posted on 2011-04-02 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      Ron, this poem has made my day.
    | Posted on 2011-03-24 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      Ron,
    This is a very simplictic piece that reveals so must truth about people and their earthly possesions.

    The only thing I really had an issue with was the rhyme scheme...in the 1st, 4th, 5th & 6th stanza you had an a,b,c,b going, but in the 2nd and 3rd there wasn't one at all...just found it a bit perplexing.

    Thanks for the good read
    ~KimbreRain
    | Posted on 2011-03-23 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]


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