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    dots Submission Name: Who are you?dots
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    Author: TheInvisible
    ASL Info:    22/f/The Valley of Doom
    Elite Ratio:    2.06 - 51/55/37
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 687
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 370



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    dotsWho are you?dots
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    Who are you to lie there,
    buried in the bottom?
    Barely concious to chaos,
    you raise to the flame,
    the apocalyptic fire.
    Suicidal in your desire,
    forgetful in your need.
    You're so cold,
    hidden in the deep,
    an arctic darkness.
    Who are you to stay here,
    waiting for warmth of a million suns?




    Submitted on 2011-03-21 11:13:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i agree with shiveringfire. this is a wonderful poem, with so many dark laters piled up on top of one another. truly gorgeus. i wonder though, are you talking about someone in particular?
    | Posted on 2011-03-22 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa... the last line is an unexpected blast after all the inky, thick, corroding darkness you layered up in earlier lines. What a technique! very strong metaphors, spoken in a steady, unflinching voice.
    | Posted on 2011-03-22 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]


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