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    dots Submission Name: For Neverdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsFor Neverdots
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    If I wait for you to call
    I'll be wasting my time
    Because you're really gone
    Despite being on my mind

    The heartache's still killing me
    A distant person would move on within a week
    A normal person would take a month or so
    An unstable person, a couple of years
    It's been three.
    I still can't let you go
    So what's wrong with me?




    Submitted on 2011-03-21 21:00:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ps

    on rereading this more times...just a thought--

    i could see the second stanza standing on its own as a poem...maybe with a slight revisement of the first line of the stanza---eliminating the "but."

    | Posted on 2011-03-21 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like the second stanza---categorizing the rejected lovers...and where do i fit in?

    i had three ex-wives to get over...the first took close to 20 years...or maybe i just wouldn't let anyone in for that long...

    after awhile it got easier...

    lots of pain in this write.
    | Posted on 2011-03-21 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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