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Double Take


Author: BlazeFlamme
ASL Info:    22/m/TX
Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23 /161 /138
Words: 130
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Double Take



If I wait long enough
It will go away
A child might say
While he hides, eyes shut tight from
An imaginary monster he thought he saw

If I wait long enough
It will go away
The young man speculates
While he rubs the stubble on his face
Dazed by the dent in his father's car

If I wait long enough
It will go away
A man might think
While he gazes at the tale signs of age
Of grey hairs and balding here or there

If I wait long enough
It will go away
I tend to pray
While I analyze all the ways
Yet can't fabricate one for us to be

A dying hope
Of futility
From make believe
And long lasting dreams




Submitted on 2011-03-21 21:55:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Sooner or later it all goes away, doesn't it. One of the most valuable things I ever learned was to let it go, just let it go. And you know what? The world in fact did not come to an end, at least not yet. It's all just like a dream in the end. Nice message.
| Posted on 2011-03-23 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
  we keep wishing to take back things we did...

and sometimes we want to take back that that we didn't...

making things un-happen...or making things happen--

if only we could make that which keeps us apart go away, like the dents or the monsters in the closet or the gray hairs...if only.
| Posted on 2011-03-21 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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