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    dots Submission Name: Double Takedots

    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsDouble Takedots

    If I wait long enough
    It will go away
    A child might say
    While he hides, eyes shut tight from
    An imaginary monster he thought he saw

    If I wait long enough
    It will go away
    The young man speculates
    While he rubs the stubble on his face
    Dazed by the dent in his father's car

    If I wait long enough
    It will go away
    A man might think
    While he gazes at the tale signs of age
    Of grey hairs and balding here or there

    If I wait long enough
    It will go away
    I tend to pray
    While I analyze all the ways
    Yet can't fabricate one for us to be

    A dying hope
    Of futility
    From make believe
    And long lasting dreams

    Submitted on 2011-03-21 21:55:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sooner or later it all goes away, doesn't it. One of the most valuable things I ever learned was to let it go, just let it go. And you know what? The world in fact did not come to an end, at least not yet. It's all just like a dream in the end. Nice message.
    | Posted on 2011-03-23 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      we keep wishing to take back things we did...

    and sometimes we want to take back that that we didn't...

    making things un-happen...or making things happen--

    if only we could make that which keeps us apart go away, like the dents or the monsters in the closet or the gray hairs...if only.
    | Posted on 2011-03-21 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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