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    dots Submission Name: I Hear A Heartbeatdots
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    Author: unwantedlove20
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 16/12/11
    Words: 343
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Love
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       again....sorry for any incorect spelling...any incorrect grammer or punctuation.... hope you like it


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    dotsI Hear A Heartbeatdots
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    i hear a heartbeating but i know its not mine.
    i hear a heartbeating
    i need to get to it now,
    fast
    before it goes away
    before i am alone again
    i hear a heartbeating
    and i run towards the sound
    but it seems that the closer
    i get the more faded the beats become
    i stand still in a very dim...
    a very dim what?
    where am i?
    how long have i been here?
    how long shall i stay?
    the heartbeats become louder,
    closer
    i can't believe it
    after all this time asking myself
    if i was alone
    another breathing, blinking
    heartbeating person is approaching
    i hear a heartbeating and im wondering,
    "Who does this heartbeat belong to?"
    when will i see this person
    ever second feels like a year
    i hear a heartbeating
    but i know its not mine
    this heartbeat i've been hearing
    belongs to the most unexpected person
    this heartbeat belongs to the person
    that has put me through the most pain
    the most agony
    the cause of all my tears
    my screaming at night
    the scars on my wrists
    the thoughts of suicide
    of all the negative
    he was also the cause of all my smiles
    the sparkles in my eyes
    the actual laugh in my laughter
    the warmness in my cheecks
    the goosebumps on my arms
    the butterflies in my stomach
    my legs become weak
    and i begin to loose my breath
    remember
    inhale
    exhale
    i open my eyes
    i hear a heartbeat
    the same one that stopped mine
    everytime it came around
    the same heartbeat that told me
    that it loved me
    the same heartbeat that said we would
    always be together
    that we would always beat
    at the same time
    it feels like wherever i was
    wherever we were
    the place was getting smaller
    utterly fast
    i turned and ran
    but he seemed to be able to keep the pace
    i suddenly fell
    how?
    where would i land?
    for now none of it matters
    as long as im away from you...




    Submitted on 2011-03-23 15:05:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Bravo! Kudos and all that other god jazz. I found this astounding from beginning to end. Truly this is marvelous! Thanks for posting and keep up the wonderful writing.
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    | Posted on 2011-03-24 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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