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    dots Submission Name: these tearsdots

    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    25/ DFW
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585/498/311
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsthese tearsdots

    for so long i had my heart surrounded
    a steel wall that was fortified with pain
    i let everyone think that i was ok with this
    fooled them into believing i was happy
    then one day i met a man who changed everything
    he broke through my walls with his first kiss
    he brought the sun back into my heart
    brought the taste of bliss back to my lips
    but now the pains returning
    and the darkness is closing in
    i should of known better then to throw my wall out
    cause hes starting to get under my skin
    he tells me how he needs me
    then discards me with his next breath
    i dont really know how to handle this
    cause my hearts getting crushed again
    i set myself up for failure i guess
    cause i wanted this so badly
    now im not sure just what to do
    cause its been so long since ive felt like this
    the pain is new and sharp
    it steals my breath and hurts my heart
    i want to smile but all ive got are these tears.

    Submitted on 2011-03-24 14:55:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i know what its like to have developed a well fortified wall then have a Trojan horse come in, convince you to take the wall down, then destroy you. your emotion is strong, and so are your words. good write, and my only advise is if he knows how much he hurts you then its not worth it.
    | Posted on 2011-04-29 00:00:00 | by insanegemini | [ Reply to This ]
      lots of emotion in this piece. like it..
    | Posted on 2011-03-25 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]

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