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these tears

Author: scardnscared
ASL Info:    25/ DFW
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Words: 185
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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these tears

for so long i had my heart surrounded
a steel wall that was fortified with pain
i let everyone think that i was ok with this
fooled them into believing i was happy
then one day i met a man who changed everything
he broke through my walls with his first kiss
he brought the sun back into my heart
brought the taste of bliss back to my lips
but now the pains returning
and the darkness is closing in
i should of known better then to throw my wall out
cause hes starting to get under my skin
he tells me how he needs me
then discards me with his next breath
i dont really know how to handle this
cause my hearts getting crushed again
i set myself up for failure i guess
cause i wanted this so badly
now im not sure just what to do
cause its been so long since ive felt like this
the pain is new and sharp
it steals my breath and hurts my heart
i want to smile but all ive got are these tears.

Submitted on 2011-03-24 14:55:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i know what its like to have developed a well fortified wall then have a Trojan horse come in, convince you to take the wall down, then destroy you. your emotion is strong, and so are your words. good write, and my only advise is if he knows how much he hurts you then its not worth it.
| Posted on 2011-04-29 00:00:00 | by insanegemini | [ Reply to This ]
  lots of emotion in this piece. like it..
| Posted on 2011-03-25 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]

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