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    dots Submission Name: Shadow 4dots

    Author: girly101
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 292/310/149
    Words: 375
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsShadow 4dots


    There was something magical-
    A spark to what we had
    An attraction, that when broken
    Nearly caused me to go mad

    And I was then caught
    In the throws of loss and fear
    I'd lost all I ever sought
    And so I shed my last tears

    I cried my soul to pieces
    And I begged you not to go
    But you stubbornly turned away
    Letting no emotion show

    Panic-stricken and confused
    Your old words whispered through my head
    And I clung to them tightly
    Knowing if I let go I’d be dead

    But the fear drained away
    And your words faded out
    And the only thing that filled my head
    Was depression and strong doubt

    No more tears left these eyes
    I really just ran out
    And my heart didn’t sting anymore
    It started to block everything out

    And for a time I lay
    Silent and dark
    With nothing left to say-
    The Shadow fled from light

    One day I realized
    That was my last break
    I looked around with jaded eyes
    And knew I’d had all I could take

    I shoved you, Reaper
    Far away
    So I could try to live
    Life day by day

    Happiness didn’t come
    But I forced it on
    The Shadow with a smile
    Woke the following dawn

    The first time I’d ever been so cruel
    You see Reaper,
    Though I’d lied my life away,
    I’d never fooled myself

    But this time the lie ran so deep
    And the façade so strong
    That I convinced even me
    That nothing was wrong

    But as they begin
    All stories must end
    And my white cloak is revealing my sin
    As it slips away

    The mask is falling
    From my tear stricken face
    And the pawns are all moving
    From their allotted place

    My castle is crumbling
    The dragons awakening
    And guards are fumbling
    To hide away

    Here I stand
    Once more alone
    I feel empty and exposed
    My real self shown

    You memory floods my mind once more
    As I stand at your door
    The dragon gives chase
    will you save me?

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