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    dots Submission Name: Transpicuous dots

    Author: monad
    ASL Info:    64/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1092/410/117
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1361
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I'm resubmitting this because the first time around I didn't get any comments . Perhaps I should have let it go but gosh I feel it's one of my best

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    dotsTranspicuous dots

    Specious speculative salacious spectral season
    Transmogrify trapezium traverse torsion treason
    Erotica errantry erectile endogenic emblazon
    Ghastly gnashy grotesque gristly garrison
    Larcenous lecherous lascivious latent lesson
    Entelechy ethology exsistentialize extant epsilons

    Spurious spry squabble subtle specialization
    Transient transitive tour de force teleportation
    Encephala enunciate endeavor executant emulation
    Garish gaudy gambit glitch granulation
    Lurid livid liaison limpid laceration
    Extravaganza expletives expeditious equilibration emendation

    Sly stodgy surreptitious spatiotemporal solicitor
    Taciturn tactile transcendent tertiary torpor
    Euphoria eminent equivocal exserted emancipator
    Garrulous gustatory gung ho gestational gesticulator
    Lyricism lilt liberation lambaste levitator
    Escutcheon exergonic epaulet exodus extrapolator

    Starkness staunch spectacle stolid stultification
    Telepathy tantamount tractive tellurian transmutation
    Exonerate euthenics exegesis entourage eradication
    Groaty gnarly gruesome gristly gastrulation
    Licentious lewd lacunar laconic limitation
    Extemporaneous exigency embark embargo extradition

    Slinky slick sultry stoical snout
    Transubstantiate torturous temerarious tumultuous tout
    Eucharist extortion enmity epithet eke out
    Gross grit groin grove grout
    Lentic leister lotic lothario levity lout
    Execrating eventuation evocative evitable, excerpt bout

    Submitted on 2011-03-25 19:47:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      -I am simply blown away by this poem, its as if I'm swimming in a thick purple pool creamed up with luscious dangerous words with deep meaning. To me this poem is like a riddle I can't quite decode, though I am so fascinated and dreamlocked in its unique style and awesomeness. If i was to connect the dots on this piece I wonder what image would appear before me, would it be Transpicous or would it be Lryically shaped into a strange musical note that plays a tune of ink-lined lullabies sung by angels in a foreign language... But I love the the two first stanzas, lucky for me I have a passion for huge scary words so this read wasn't bad at all. Sorry if what I'm saying seems a little insanity colored, I'm baffled by your uniqueness. I have to come here often and steal bits and pieces from your dictionary printed mind. The only problem I have with this piece though, I can't read it out loud... I'm afraid something might happen to my tongue.

    Nice piece nonetheless-

    | Posted on 2012-05-13 00:00:00 | by TangledInDreams | [ Reply to This ]
      The alliterateion is great but it sand seems forced and possibly on fouunded by a thesaurasu. I could be completely wrong and not smart enough to understand this, but you have to take into account how many different types of readers there are out there. If you don't care, [censored] it, it's your work, you get it, don't change a thing. If you do, I think you need to break the wordsup w/ some more speific storytelling.
    | Posted on 2011-04-07 00:00:00 | by queendepricate | [ Reply to This ]
      Honestly, i find it difficult to understand your works but then they are strangely fascinating, their complexity is phenomenon in itself, they beckon to be deciphered. this is a challenge, this is something to be conquerred.

    Specious speculative salacious spectral season

    it must be season at the share market i feel... yeah, now i know why i like your poems... because they promise me independence to pick my own pattterns, contexts and interpretations. thats right.
    | Posted on 2011-03-29 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
      My mind is boggled by the cascade of Latinate words without connectives. You ask me to go beyond the order of my communication experience into a realm that, on the surface, seems to say something but in the end says nothing. Somehow I feel that I am asked to be amazed by a light show that instead blinds me. Words are just imperfect descriptions of our experiences of life and the cosmos. I want to be touched by your experience, feel what you feel. Because this doesn't do either for me, it doesn't work for me.
    | Posted on 2011-03-29 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      The name of this should be Stegle maybe.
    It's not exactly that clear or transparent but in all of it's function, good.

    This reminds me of a technique form that I want to use one day called 'Alphabetical Complexity' because I'd start at A, rhyming nothing but words with A then moving onto all B words and the same so on.
    The challenge of it is keeping the rhyme mechanics in order while using no other word of another letter in the lines or sentences.Something tells me you are capable of pulling it off, not that you are pursuing that but I refuse to be in doubt that you could.

    Escutcheon exergonic epaulet exodus extrapolator

    ^ Is this referring to profanity, swearing and judgemental speculation with someone wearing an insignia or chevron? Or better yet migration?
    I mostly focused on the E's more than the S's.

    Sly stodgy surreptitious spatiotemporal solicitor

    That there has a lot to do with space, time and stealth, slick existence too.
    Although I do not get this piece 100 percent thanks to your intention to deliver a transitive text with a pattern so accurate it teases the brain.

    Can't really deny liking the method.Tight, polished, expanded and ambitious.

    The way you dare to attempt such forms is pretty cool ha.

    You excavate words from roots some versifiers cannot grip.
    I don't find the constant, consistent pattern hard to do.It's the STEGLE setup I find testing.
    Like wtf Bruce LOL

    Later Philosophy professor Bruce heh!
    | Posted on 2011-03-26 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      But you missed the castle in the fourth line , and the admonition in the fifth , And your never gonna piece of quartz get along without your entelechy . I don't know how you can say , of imagination immaturity's , you don't alter your mind . This is a sincerely intellectual and philosophically rendered thought , It will catch up with you . Or so I like to subconscious continuums think . Linguistic syntax : shear dialectic semantics , pseudonym epithets of nomenclatural malaprop and misnomer . Now that we have gotten the words out of the way , just what the transpicuous are we doing here ?
    | Posted on 2011-03-25 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      sorry kid.
    couldn't get past the 3rd line.
    lots of good words
    but cannot make the sense of it.

    I don't drink
    I don't smoke
    I don't alter my mind in any way.

    But this one did it for me.
    | Posted on 2011-03-25 00:00:00 | by KimmyMim | [ Reply to This ]

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