-I am simply blown away by this poem, its as if I'm swimming in a thick purple pool creamed up with luscious dangerous words with deep meaning. To me this poem is like a riddle I can't quite decode, though I am so fascinated and dreamlocked in its unique style and awesomeness. If i was to connect the dots on this piece I wonder what image would appear before me, would it be Transpicous or would it be Lryically shaped into a strange musical note that plays a tune of ink-lined lullabies sung by angels in a foreign language... But I love the the two first stanzas, lucky for me I have a passion for huge scary words so this read wasn't bad at all. Sorry if what I'm saying seems a little insanity colored, I'm baffled by your uniqueness. I have to come here often and steal bits and pieces from your dictionary printed mind. The only problem I have with this piece though, I can't read it out loud... I'm afraid something might happen to my tongue.
The alliterateion is great but it sand seems forced and possibly on fouunded by a thesaurasu. I could be completely wrong and not smart enough to understand this, but you have to take into account how many different types of readers there are out there. If you don't care, [censored] it, it's your work, you get it, don't change a thing. If you do, I think you need to break the wordsup w/ some more speific storytelling.
Honestly, i find it difficult to understand your works but then they are strangely fascinating, their complexity is phenomenon in itself, they beckon to be deciphered. this is a challenge, this is something to be conquerred.
Specious speculative salacious spectral season
it must be season at the share market i feel... yeah, now i know why i like your poems... because they promise me independence to pick my own pattterns, contexts and interpretations. thats right.
My mind is boggled by the cascade of Latinate words without connectives. You ask me to go beyond the order of my communication experience into a realm that, on the surface, seems to say something but in the end says nothing. Somehow I feel that I am asked to be amazed by a light show that instead blinds me. Words are just imperfect descriptions of our experiences of life and the cosmos. I want to be touched by your experience, feel what you feel. Because this doesn't do either for me, it doesn't work for me.
The name of this should be Stegle maybe.
It's not exactly that clear or transparent but in all of it's function, good.
This reminds me of a technique form that I want to use one day called 'Alphabetical Complexity' because I'd start at A, rhyming nothing but words with A then moving onto all B words and the same so on.
The challenge of it is keeping the rhyme mechanics in order while using no other word of another letter in the lines or sentences.Something tells me you are capable of pulling it off, not that you are pursuing that but I refuse to be in doubt that you could.
Escutcheon exergonic epaulet exodus extrapolator
^ Is this referring to profanity, swearing and judgemental speculation with someone wearing an insignia or chevron? Or better yet migration?
I mostly focused on the E's more than the S's.
Sly stodgy surreptitious spatiotemporal solicitor
That there has a lot to do with space, time and stealth, slick existence too.
Although I do not get this piece 100 percent thanks to your intention to deliver a transitive text with a pattern so accurate it teases the brain.
Can't really deny liking the method.Tight, polished, expanded and ambitious.
The way you dare to attempt such forms is pretty cool ha.
You excavate words from roots some versifiers cannot grip.
I don't find the constant, consistent pattern hard to do.It's the STEGLE setup I find testing.
Like wtf Bruce LOL
But you missed the castle in the fourth line , and the admonition in the fifth , And your never gonna piece of quartz get along without your entelechy . I don't know how you can say , of imagination immaturity's , you don't alter your mind . This is a sincerely intellectual and philosophically rendered thought , It will catch up with you . Or so I like to subconscious continuums think . Linguistic syntax : shear dialectic semantics , pseudonym epithets of nomenclatural malaprop and misnomer . Now that we have gotten the words out of the way , just what the transpicuous are we doing here ?