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    dots Submission Name: Surrealdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 400
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dotsSurrealdots
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    Things are surreal
    I'm living a life I've longed for ....
    Since I was a little girl

    I've arrived

    I'm here and am leary what lurks behind each door I enter?
    I wonder when it'll end
    How will this happiness I feel
    This great sence of pride I've achieved
    Fade... slowly drifting away into the darkness I'm so fimliar with ravaging my short lived happiness
    this shall happen soon
    my only question is when?
    shall I expect those ill favored tears soon
    or may I enjoy another week of this surreal life I am currently living?




    Submitted on 2011-03-26 01:56:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love the feeling of this piece.. it's kinda slowly creeping up on you... especially the first stanza...

    "Things are surreal
    I'm living a life I've longed for ....
    Since I was a little girl

    I've arrived"

    ...it's all stated with a sense of wonder... almost as in disbelief, which is a wonderful into...

    after that i kind of got lost in the mis-spellings, because the piece has a creeping upon it's moment feel, it really takes away from the piece, when the brain of the reader has to take a pause to adjust and understand what you are really saying here...

    "I'm here and am leery <leery> what lurks behind each door I enter?
    I wonder when it'll end
    How will this happiness I feel
    This great sence <sense> of pride I've achieved
    Fade... slowly drifting away into the darkness I'm so filmier <familiar> with"
    | Posted on 2011-03-26 00:00:00 | by Oracle | [ Reply to This ]
      You need some 'prolongevity' or 'perpetual standard' of living to keep that balance steady on the scales of positive and negative.

    Don't expect horrific conclusions, it deteriorates the feeling that things can be okay and that difficult times play out believable.

    There will be times when you have to soak up the phantasmagoric and dreamlike stuff.Keep a clear head by try to clasp on to closures and openings in life.

    Balance.Doors to new beginnings or bridges crossing to individuality and existence is unpredictable mostly, never know what will come.
    Then there is optimism, the tool we use so often hammering down those feeling and little voices of darkness.

    Go for having more good times than bad and then you may find which correct path to take.
    But everything going smooth for you now needs to stay and that will have advantages for you.

    Know the illusion and the reality, reality hurts us but we must take that in life naturally.
    The thing about surreal feelings and questions demanding answers is no one who has not had a hard life get it.

    You will grow from suffering, it's all on your choices now.

    I'm on eggshells and nervous, perhaps this was off key but I do want you to overcome, be revived with a new bright take on life instead of gloomy.
    | Posted on 2011-03-26 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]


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