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    dots Submission Name: IMAGINEdots
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    Author: submarine
    Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 128/91/45
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Imagine how life would be
    If we could love free
    Be together forever
    And nobody was angry.

    Imagine us on the beach
    Sand sweeping through our feet
    Talking about the future
    And our lives with each other

    Imagine or wedding day
    As my father gives me away
    We’d say our vows of love
    Promising forever

    Imagine the home we’ll have
    Perfect for kids and a pet
    The smell of apple pie
    And the sound of lullabies

    Imagine us growing old
    More in love than ever
    Thinking of the life we’ve lived
    And how far we’ve made it.




    Submitted on 2011-03-27 01:21:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good piece. I am 25, and with my experiences I can state these are things one can only imagine about. Exact point of your poem.
    | Posted on 2011-03-29 00:00:00 | by sjahangir | [ Reply to This ]


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