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For Us The End


Author: trynfinity
ASL Info:    38/f/California
Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 149 /145 /91
Words: 120
Class/Type: Poetry /Broken
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ending of a relationship


For Us The End



I've got to say good-bye now
walk away to keep you close.
I don't know how to do this
to be without you and grow old. I thought you'd always be there
be forever by my side.
Along the way I lost you
you took a different ride. I have to become stronger
to do this on my own.
You've always been the strong one
I wasn't supposed to be alone. Yet if we stay together
I'll lose my only light.
I'll wake up to find you hate me
erase me from your life. I've got to say good-bye now
to keep my world and friend.
My heart and soul are dying
is this for us the end.?

3/13/2011




Submitted on 2011-03-27 04:05:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Strong emotions that we all feel in this type of situation. I know it always made me feel less whole as if I was missing a part of myself, but as always time does help heal all wounds and helped me find that part of myself again.
You have done very well in this piece portraying the saddness of a break up in simple words that hold mountains of feeling and imagery.
Great Job!
| Posted on 2011-03-27 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]
  a momentous decision...to keep you i have to let you go...

there is such a sadness to this...have felt it before and relate to this...

similar to a situation where there are two best friends and we are in love with one of them...only they are together...so in order to be close we have to be the third wheel, just the friend...and can't let on how we feel because we will ruin everything and lose the friend in the process...both in fact.

| Posted on 2011-03-27 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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