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Living Nightmare


Author: PhantomRose
ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois
Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43 /58 /35
Words: 291
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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Living Nightmare



Through darkness I wander
through landmarks unknown
Making no noise
and feeling alone
Serpent-like branches
tangle my hair
They stab me and scratch me
and strengthen my scare
I hope that my heart
does not give me away
For the sound of it beating
is clearer than day
There are eyes all around me
I feel their cold stare
They watch as I stumble
and crawl here and there
Tears streak my face
making trails through the dirt
Will anyone look for me?
will they know that I'm hurt?
I yearn for the moon
or some form of light
Anything but fear
of this cold, black night
Behind me a crack
sounds through the night
And the way that it echoes
fills me with freight
Something is coming
I feel it inside
I search the trees desperately
for somewhere to hide
I dash up a tree
as fast as I can
But it climbs up right after me
making me wish that I'd ran
I hear scratches right under me
then my leg fills with pain
I look down in horror
at the spreading blood stain
My flesh has been torn
by teeth oh so jagged
My skin hangs by threads
and my pant leg is shreddded
From the darkness below me
comes a heart-sinking growl
It's the sound of an animal-
a beast on the prowl
It's tasted my blood
now it's coming for more
And my heart skipps a beat
when it lets t a roar
There's no place to run-
no place to hide
I fall to the ground
when it ripps out my side
I lay there defenseless
all bleeding and broken
Till the beast stands above me
and tears my throat open




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  A dark picture of fear , lonliness and death drawn into a poem so easily read.
| Posted on 2011-04-18 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
  This IS such a fine and griping story poem with some first class meter and good rhyme, the first 25 or 30 lines I thought exceptionally fine, indeed [no "e" in "fright] masterful work here and I'd like to see more in the same vien--no pun intended.... fine stuff!!!
| Posted on 2011-04-14 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
  I really enjoyed the imagery in this poem, its like i can see it all happening in front of me good job there :)

just of shear curiosity, is the beast tearing at you a metaphor to something bigger? you don't have to answer if you don't want, just wondering, even if it is not the poem is still a very good fantasy.
| Posted on 2011-04-08 00:00:00 | by insanegemini | [ Reply to This ]
  great lpoem cant help but feel the fear when i was reading this it kept my attion the whole time bout a lil over half way down it looks like u went to say something and didnt finish a thought or forgot to typ it great job keep writeing
| Posted on 2011-03-28 00:00:00 | by vencix | [ Reply to This ]


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