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    dots Submission Name: Living Nightmaredots
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    Author: PhantomRose
    ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43/58/35
    Words: 291
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsLiving Nightmaredots
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    Through darkness I wander
    through landmarks unknown
    Making no noise
    and feeling alone
    Serpent-like branches
    tangle my hair
    They stab me and scratch me
    and strengthen my scare
    I hope that my heart
    does not give me away
    For the sound of it beating
    is clearer than day
    There are eyes all around me
    I feel their cold stare
    They watch as I stumble
    and crawl here and there
    Tears streak my face
    making trails through the dirt
    Will anyone look for me?
    will they know that I'm hurt?
    I yearn for the moon
    or some form of light
    Anything but fear
    of this cold, black night
    Behind me a crack
    sounds through the night
    And the way that it echoes
    fills me with freight
    Something is coming
    I feel it inside
    I search the trees desperately
    for somewhere to hide
    I dash up a tree
    as fast as I can
    But it climbs up right after me
    making me wish that I'd ran
    I hear scratches right under me
    then my leg fills with pain
    I look down in horror
    at the spreading blood stain
    My flesh has been torn
    by teeth oh so jagged
    My skin hangs by threads
    and my pant leg is shreddded
    From the darkness below me
    comes a heart-sinking growl
    It's the sound of an animal-
    a beast on the prowl
    It's tasted my blood
    now it's coming for more
    And my heart skipps a beat
    when it lets t a roar
    There's no place to run-
    no place to hide
    I fall to the ground
    when it ripps out my side
    I lay there defenseless
    all bleeding and broken
    Till the beast stands above me
    and tears my throat open




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      A dark picture of fear , lonliness and death drawn into a poem so easily read.
    | Posted on 2011-04-18 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      This IS such a fine and griping story poem with some first class meter and good rhyme, the first 25 or 30 lines I thought exceptionally fine, indeed [no "e" in "fright] masterful work here and I'd like to see more in the same vien--no pun intended.... fine stuff!!!
    | Posted on 2011-04-14 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed the imagery in this poem, its like i can see it all happening in front of me good job there :)

    just of shear curiosity, is the beast tearing at you a metaphor to something bigger? you don't have to answer if you don't want, just wondering, even if it is not the poem is still a very good fantasy.
    | Posted on 2011-04-08 00:00:00 | by insanegemini | [ Reply to This ]
      great lpoem cant help but feel the fear when i was reading this it kept my attion the whole time bout a lil over half way down it looks like u went to say something and didnt finish a thought or forgot to typ it great job keep writeing
    | Posted on 2011-03-28 00:00:00 | by vencix | [ Reply to This ]


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