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dealing with loneliness

Author: concrete_rose
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this is something i wrote after a breakup from a guy i lived with and i think people can relate to it if they've ever had anything like that happen thx

dealing with loneliness

dealing with loneliness....

nothing reminds me of you more,
than spending all this time alone,
watching outside the window,
feeling the wind come in through the cracks,
hearing the rain equivalent to my pain.

nothing makes me more alone,
than seeing couples holding hands,
watching love scenes on the tv,
oh how i try and turn my head away,
sometimes i catch a glimpse and sigh,
how i miss the touch of you.

nothing dissopointed me more in my life,
than you not abiding by your word,
for it meaning absolutely nothing,
for leaving our daughter out there hanging,
like clothes on a line dancing in the breeze.

To you there was no seriousness,
to you i did not love anyone,
but what you did not see was-
the truth in my heart of hearts,
the special place you held,
and how forgiving i could be.


Submitted on 2011-03-27 14:37:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Strange how seeing other lovers makes one even more blue and lonely when you've lost someone.

The mood and story in your prose strikes a familiar chord to all who have suffered through a failed love affair.

Nice work!
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