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    dots Submission Name: Dreamdots
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    Author: ShadowsnLights
    ASL Info:    25 f canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.24 - 71/107/66
    Words: 632
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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       Dreams are... So strange... :S


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    I had this fucked up dream last night! This thing was stuck on earth, and I had to send it back with these special powers... Anyways, the dinosaur (Thats what it looked like) was about to leave... And as it floated upwards, these rose petals were flowing from its mouth... So when I looked up at it, the clouds and the rose petals were swirling all around it... Very beautiful... Then something weird happened... I was in its head! I could see through its eyes everything it saw. The milky way, the distant stars and galaxies... We were flying so fast... But in space, one can't really tell the speed or distance of objects... Then we were approaching a blue planet, very similar to earth's size and shape... ( Guess thats why it came to ours, thinking it was home) I was getting panicked because we were still flying at a high rate of speed. We entered the atmosphere like a fireball! Meanwhile, I was still in its head and I was shouting "No! No! NOOOOOO!" But just before we hit the ground, it slowed down and landed very gently. Then it opened its mouth and the rose petals came flowing out again... And in the petals, I was formed! I WAS STUCK ON A DISTANT PLANET, WITH A DINOSAUR AND NO WAY TO GET BACK!!! Then the dinosaur took no more notice of me and just walked away... :S So I tried to follow it for a while, but its strides were so long, I just couldn't keep up! Then I heard a growl. I turned and behind me were a pair of bears (Looked like grizzlies to me) So I got scared and I tried to scramble up a short cliff wall... The bears came running at me! I was already at the top, just had to find a grip to pull myself up. But there were loose rocks everywhere... And right underneath me, the bears were standing up, trying to bite my ankles... (I was flailing them about, trying to avoid their jaws) Then I stepped on the bears snouts and pushed myself up over the edge! I was relatively safe... For the moment... I stood up and looked around... There were no towns or roads. Nothing that showed the possibilty of a living civilization. It was a very lonely feeling, standing at the top of the cliffs, with no hopes of ever seeing a human face again... :( In the distance there was a familiar shape. The dinosaur was coming back! (The bears took off) I was worried that it would devour me... So I hid behind some rocks. But as it approached my hiding spot, it spoke! "Hey. Where are you?" I peeked out and saw that it was looking on the ground, and behind some rocks that I was standing nearby earlier... I came out from hiding, (I was shaking like a leaf at this point) I said " P-p-please... D-don't eat me!" Then it swung its huge head towards me and asked "What the heck are you doing up there?!" I told him about the bears and he just laughed! "They probably would have eaten you! You silly human... Why didn't you just stay where I left you? If you hadn't moved around, they wouldn't have even known you were there! Blind Bears can't see a damned thing! ...Or smell ...Or hear. But they can feel the vibrations that our feet make when we walk!" I started crying and I asked him "Will I ever see my home again?" The dinosaur didn't say anything. It just looked at me, came towards me, THEN IT ATE ME! And then I woke up... I guess that was its way of sending me back home!




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      Hey i loved this dream of yours. a dinosaur spreading love, hope and rose petals then it becomes spaceship too... multipurpose and very handy! (i want to be a little kid right now and want this as my bed time story)

    the tale of the blind bears is symbolic of our misdirected fears.

    overall very interesting and totally enjoyable!
    | Posted on 2011-03-29 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]


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