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    dots Submission Name: Roll Through dots
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    Author: Abass
    Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 7/8/9
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    This is no chaos nor gloom,

    a pleasent thought and feeling,

    overwhelms and gives notice of doom.

    dropped after raised to the cieling.



    Believed by very few,

    no regrets,

    scrape me off your shoe,

    he's slurring his torrets.



    He won't stop yelling,

    the fellow in my cranium,

    a story worth telling,

    you've broken my walls of titanium.



    Five, internal rock



    Hulk head,

    trapped and secure,

    break necks like dinner bread.

    Red rage pure.



    Four, external shock



    You've tested my vim too,

    Penciles down,

    I'll test it on you;

    army hands, forced crown.



    Three, interior block



    Roll with the punches, very true;



    Two, excrete a knock



    I'll wait until the next one rolls through...



    One, champions belt lock




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