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    dots Submission Name: And then I randots
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    Author: Alilia
    ASL Info:    18/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    1.7 - 28/41/50
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAnd then I randots
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    Every family has their secrets
    The darkness that lies in waiting
    Will we ever know each one
    When they all just run away

    The Father never does lay
    His hand upon his wife
    Until that clinking bottle
    Is raised to his lips

    The son won the championship
    To all a saint, but at night
    He sneaks his way into his sisters room
    Her brother then a demon

    The mother keeps a book
    Of old family photos
    She has already given up
    On her dreams of a perfect home

    The daughter cowers in fear at night
    Her skin pale and dark circles under her eyes
    She never struggles, never complains
    Her ice blue eyes planning escape

    To run, run, run away
    From the pain of the “perfect” home
    No one will ever know
    How far she ran away




    Submitted on 2011-03-28 16:48:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow. i really like this. it has truth to it. and i know what this would feel like, if I still lived with my parents. it would be no fun. but nice job writing this. i like it a lot :)
    | Posted on 2011-03-29 00:00:00 | by DiNoDaNeH | [ Reply to This ]


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