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    dots Submission Name: Acceptance... Rejectiondots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
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       I just want a family who will love me who will accept me. Who I can go to and tell all my secrets to.. who won't judge me.


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    Once had the feeling of acceptance within this family I currently reside within
    Now feelings of betrayal and foolishness only exists within me
    Lost I am
    Misguided I have been

    For if I do not belong here, then where do I belong?
    If these people I am with now cannot ... will not accept me
    Then I must ask who will?

    Yes I am a sinner
    I have made several mistakes in my life
    Nevertheless I plead to you now
    I'm begging you to understand I have changed my ways
    I have learned from my past mistakes!

    Yet, my past haunts me each day
    As I have seen this family who once accepted me
    Allowed me into their hearts...
    Now rejection only lies between us all
    The tension can be cut with a knife
    All due to the darkness that seems to constantly consumes any good in this life I lead.




    Submitted on 2011-03-28 18:27:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good write. you can feel the feeling inside it. The lost and mangled life you led and there is a ray of open that is quickly being extinguished where once the warm light of love dwells. Past always finds it way to us. Just make the past a part of the present you and embrace the mistakes made as great lessons. Hiding from them makes them manifest in ugly and unpredictable ways. Lovely write i hope you the best. Times of trial are what makes grey hairs and gives us the merit to advice when we are old.
    | Posted on 2011-03-31 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]


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