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    dots Submission Name: Forgive and Forgetdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I just came up with this just now, getting used to spreading positive vibes.


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    dotsForgive and Forgetdots
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    A distinctive voice in the distance,
    Calls for my presence,
    Yet I know that's the devil,
    Calling me,
    Since my adolescence.

    When I turn my back on him,
    He calls louder when I dream,
    Foe or friend,
    I know my soul,
    Is not for him to redeem.

    Yet he stopped calling,
    When God blew back the breath,
    In my lungs,
    Stumbling with death,
    I just happened to get up and run.

    Now with God in mind,
    I really have no regrets,
    His only condition just so,
    I can evade death,
    Was the simple fact,
    That I was to forgive and forget.






    Submitted on 2011-03-29 21:31:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yeah, this poem really radiates positive vibes... and inspires to let go the wrongs of the past, dont cling to them, dont dwell upon them nd never let them cling on to you.

    when you turn your back, he clls louder... thats a perfect observation, nd if you can ignore him even then... then you are the real winner.
    | Posted on 2011-03-31 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree with heather! this is great. i often think of the devil as chocolate though (because at first its good, then it makes you fat) but maybe thats just me ;|
    | Posted on 2011-03-30 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, is all i can say. loved it! i mean, the constant battle we have with the devil...it's like he's everywhere, waiting to pounce right on us.
    i like your faith...we have just a few people writing about God here. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2011-03-30 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]


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