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    dots Submission Name: Fortune Cookiedots
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    Author: roxygirl239
    ASL Info:    14/f/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 450/305/44
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 387
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 709



    Description:
       haha. I was bored. this makes entirely no sense, but I'm in a nonsensical mood!!!!


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    dotsFortune Cookiedots
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    I’ve killed some one-
    Again
    I’m sorry
    The date just got
    Out of control
    He was crying…
    (I almost floated away)

    Honestly
    I’m so sorry
    My chopsticks
    Just happened
    To pierce
    His brown eyes
    To the point
    He was blinded
    (Blue eyes
    Are so much
    Prettier)

    Please
    Forgive me
    For shoving him in a chest
    And throwing him in
    The alligator infested
    Waters
    Maybe he’ll learn
    How it feels
    To have some one snap
    Back at you

    So remember...
    Always read
    Your cookie's
    Fortune




    Submitted on 2004-07-28 20:09:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You can't help but feel sorry for the guy. I bet he was trying to be a complete gentleman. Oh well, you win some and lose some. I was amused.
    | Posted on 2004-07-29 00:00:00 | by Cayman | [ Reply to This ]
      so um, remind me to never ask you out on a date. and if i do ask you out on a date, remind me not to take you to a chinese food restaurant.
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by murf | [ Reply to This ]
      satirical. I enjoyed it, because satyrical is my type of humor(or at least my favorite) muahah
    "Honestly
    I’m so sorry
    My chopsticks
    Just happened
    To pierce
    His brown eyes
    To the point
    He was blinded
    (Blue eyes
    Are so much
    Prettier)" that was my favorite part! keep it up!
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by WD20x2 | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm...an intersting write ...lol..though i like it...there is some sense in here well i read it that way..the line about having someone snap back at you...though i wish you could tie the fortune cookie part in better...that'ed rock...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      It pretty neat...stream of consciousness...Some parts rhyme very well...and its kind freaky...my style exactly. It's good! U picked an interesting words...and interesting way to put them...Well, u were really bored? heehee...just kidding, I do like it.
    Good Job!
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by Olianna | [ Reply to This ]
      Kinda a freaky interesting poem. Me likes, me really does. That poem almost left me in transe. A confusion shock...but I like it. Really good write...interesting piece.
    --Kayla
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]



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