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    dots Submission Name: The Caged Hawkdots
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    Author: ShiveringFire
    Elite Ratio:    4.9 - 328/84/22
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Caged Hawkdots
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    The caged hawk

    Did you see the pain
    In blazing aureoles of his eyes.

    Nuded of his feathers
    Wrapped in gauze and rags

    Did you see the stone glinting inside

    Mind you

    This hex cannot be trapped




    Do you think he is injured,
    Do you think that are drops of blood on him

    You will See them scabbing into corals soon.

    Dont go near, dont set him free
    He is a hawk, can be dealt by hawks only
    And Whoever is not a hawk is a sparrow to him

    So first decide who you are then begin,

    Hey! Look back, your cage is empty.

    Told ya

    This hex cannot be trapped



    For long.





    Submitted on 2011-03-31 12:11:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I got goosebumps reading this, I loved the ending, But - Dont go near, dont set him free
    He is a hawk, can be dealt by hawks only
    And Whoever is not a hawk is a sparrow to him

    So first decide who you are then begin,...That was a great line.




    | Posted on 2011-04-08 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]
      I can see that you have impressive skills as well, love the imagery of your poem, very interesting piece.

    Marco
    | Posted on 2011-03-31 00:00:00 | by Latin King | [ Reply to This ]
      That is quite the tricky poem u got there. I had to reread it to see why I diddnt understand at first ' the hex cannot be trapped.... For long'
    Good job

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    | Posted on 2011-03-31 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]


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