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    dots Submission Name: I Dodots
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    Author: trynfinity
    ASL Info:    38/f/California
    Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 149/145/91
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 472
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       A Vow


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    dotsI Dodots
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    Isaid I do
    And took a vow.
    Good times bad
    For then and now.
    I made a promise
    And it was real.
    Through it all
    It's what I feel.
    I don't expect
    The fairytale life.
    And I like being
    Simply your wife.
    I know we'll argue
    We'll have our fights.
    But when all is done
    In your arms it's right.
    I'm not perfect
    I'll admit when I'm wrong.
    Stand my ground
    Be with you strong.
    But always forever
    My heart stands true.
    A promise i'll keep
    Cause forever I do.
    3/2/2011




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    ||| Comments |||
      that is so great. well-written piece of art with beautiful music.
    You successed to describe how it goes when you truelly love someone.
    And your piece is from now a favourite of mine.
    I really liked this part most:

    And I like being
    Simply your wife.
    I know we'll argue
    We'll have our fights.
    But when all is done
    In your arms it's right.


    Great job
    | Posted on 2011-04-03 00:00:00 | by Khaled AbdAllah | [ Reply to This ]
      i read this and think...wow, this speaker really means it...

    hopefully, i say, in the next breath...

    been there on this one..the promises, to be there no matter what...

    only on the other side...the promise was flimsy--

    and when the hard times came, the disagreements, the rough patches...

    the words lost their meaning and ...left me wishing both sides had meant it.

    i like the first two words being fused...whether that was intended or not---it sets the tone for the poem...

    two people making a vow..and how refreshing it would be for both to mean it...

    this just pretty much says it...a very up front, here it is , piece...

    but i like...
    "i'll admit when i'm wrong, but stand my ground"

    i will walk beside you, not behind or in front of....

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-04-02 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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