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    dots Submission Name: Flowing Paindots

    Author: DeathTone
    ASL Info:    32 / Male / United States
    Elite Ratio:    5.54 - 81/55/30
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFlowing Paindots

    In a day where we dare not fight
    When hope is like a bird in flight
    Something we use to get away from madness
    And choose to leave behind all the sadness
    Wonder where the end is and how it will come
    Consistently debating the essence of feeling numb
    You make me feel pain you don not comprehend
    Bit I let it flow thru me from end to end
    Even though I want it gone and to feel no more
    I welcome it like an open door
    Come into my mind and figure me out
    See for yourself what I’m all about
    Let you inside my soul because I love the pain
    Those who understand me can see I’m not insane
    Just taught that the pain is how we survived
    With no hope of being revived
    Never free and always me pains is what I see
    This is how I want my life to be
    Together you and me for eternity

    Submitted on 2011-04-02 20:58:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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