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    dots Submission Name: Confusion in a word.dots
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    Author: Fadeintoreality
    Elite Ratio:    1.95 - 33/114/64
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Just a sit down, write how I feel in 60 seconds song. Don't judge to harshly.


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    dotsConfusion in a word.dots
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    Its just a touch of cold metal she said, it wont hurt

    much

    Its just a smooth ride he said, we wont crash

    yet

    Scream, scream

    Because the world is ending.

    Its just a rush, a beating of a heart, it isnt real

    love

    Hot breath, tense fingers, it isnt intense

    feelings

    hush, hush

    Because the world is listening.

    Ill breathe you in, Ill take you out

    with me

    Baby are you listening? It isnt the end of

    this.

    alive, alive

    Because the world is ending

    the world is listening

    and it just keeps spinning.

    down

    around

    confused

    I know,

    its okay

    breathe.

    blow it

    out

    forget the past

    live today

    even if it just

    to tell me you are okay.




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