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    dots Submission Name: Darksidedots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23/161/138
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsDarksidedots
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    Inner insecurity
    Leads to insincerity
    Draws knots into
    The belly of the beast

    Thought of infidelity
    Is a tempting melody
    Brawls shame and you
    Foolish in the least

    Sight of premonition
    Filled with double vision
    Falls short onto
    The hell that we perceive

    Love and cessation
    No correlation
    Will never dilute
    No choice but to believe

    Nipping sarcasm
    Scrupulous spasm
    Needless be true
    Cold is now typical

    Bleeding retrospect
    Constant recollect
    Now endless rue
    Never time critical
    For time will take us nowhere




    Submitted on 2011-04-03 06:20:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      okay this got me thinking of old relationships and how insecurity started to tear them apart...from both sides...

    a lack of trust develops because we are so insecure and can't understand why this person wants to be with us..

    then there are the "word brawls" that create the cold distance that can never be erased..the gap grows wider...and then the regrets...what got us to this point? why did we do this to each other...what we had was so good...but our insecurity was such poison...

    and often we don't learn our lesson...that darkside shows up relationship after relationship--

    "nipping sarcasm/ Scrupulous spasm"

    nice phrasing there...lots of wonderful phrasing in this...careful of spellings so the impact isn't interrupted.. "infidelity" "premonition"

    i like "love and cessation/ no correlation"

    if we trust, love without judgement or reserve and trust ourselves enough to be loved...

    then cessation would not be part of the equation.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-04-03 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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