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    dots Submission Name: Why wont you just leavedots

    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 284/251/154
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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    dotsWhy wont you just leavedots

    I knew it was the end before you said,
    My heart broke before you were sorry.
    My eyes cried before you were gone,
    Why couldnt you just leave already?

    My arms missed you before the hour,
    Your voice haunted me through my voice mail.
    A message I forgot to delete,
    Now is the only part of you I have left.

    Every thought I had, I was at fault.
    I must have done something wrong,
    I must have made you angry.
    I had to be the reason you didnt love me anymore

    In a weeks time you moved on,
    While I waited for your call,
    Never knowing trouble was coming,
    Why did you have to break my heart?

    You couldnt have left long ago,
    Had to say you didnt feel the same.
    Ive heard enough of your lies,
    Why dont you just go?

    You claimed to care for me,
    Said you loved me, and wouldnt leave.
    But it just didnt work, yeah ok
    I believed your lies but no more.
    I want you out of my heart.
    And to erase all of the memories,
    Why couldnt you just leave?

    Submitted on 2011-04-03 16:38:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you and i are under the same boat right now... we both just wish he wouldhave spared us the pain and made the end allitle more simple. all i can say is that it'll be okay hun... it'll be okay.
    | Posted on 2011-05-04 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]

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