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    dots Submission Name: The Darkness dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
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    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
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       I can never let go i can never be content and happy..


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    dotsThe Darkness dots
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    I hate seeing the sun set
    Deep beyond the trees
    Within those baby blue clouds
    The beautiful scene is deceiving

    For I know what is to come
    The darkness creeps in
    Time draws out like a blade during these hours of darkness

    Wishing only to win this war
    The war of constantly remembering
    You see,
    Its a domino effect
    If I remember the abuse
    Then I'm going to remember my drug addiction
    Next would be the night I pulled the trigger of the12 gauge shot gun...
    Forever scaring myself.. Forcing myself to remember this decision

    It only goes downhill from here
    3am now but before I know it, it'll be time to begin my day
    My eyes bloodshot
    This body limp and exhausted
    For these memories are disturbing and emtionally draining

    Yet, I go on...
    Forcing myself to believe the following night will be different
    That this is not my fate!
    Constantly remembering the events that have shaped me
    That has transformed me.. into this numb-unemotional person that now sits at the keyboard, before you.

    I am and forever will be a broken soul..
    Forever Lost Within the Darkness




    Submitted on 2011-04-03 22:33:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      pls tell this beautiful woman that she can and will find happier days, that others opinion about her is never her reality and first part to forgetin is forgivn, especially what she cant help or change.thanks Heather.
    | Posted on 2011-04-10 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]
      Ohh honey... You are not forever a broken soul.. And I know it's so hard to not let your mind and soul haunt your heart... I'm proud of you! Very proud.. You've come so far and accomplished soo much..
    Now it's time to forgive yourself.. That's the main thing I'm not sure you've done. Or done completely. And it's the hardest.

    I'm here I believe you have my new number... And I am glad when you pulled the trigger that night.... It wasn't a perfect fatal shot. My life would be less if it'd had been.

    Always
    HEATHER
    | Posted on 2011-04-04 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]


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