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    dots Submission Name: i run marathonsdots
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    Author: Someones Epiphany
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       okay... so i only run half marathons but that doesnt sound remotely as poetic haha. but i have taken up running to distract myself from the longing... hopefully we can be together for ever soon and i can give this running gig up haha!


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    dotsi run marathonsdots
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    i run marathons
    without you

    the thud of my feet
    on the pavement
    the thud of my heart
    interacting with my lungs
    the rhythm of my
    arms and legs
    flailing as they may

    distracts me
    from not having you

    some jest
    i'm ethiopian now
    running long distance
    without thought
    but they are wrong
    there is always thoughts

    you you you

    i run marathons
    without you
    slowly counting down
    each volatile day
    until i find myself
    running
    thud thud
    rhythm flailing
    into your arms
    once more.




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      And here we are again, with me reading you and wondering how you know how I feel. I too run as a distraction. Though my running is more of a symbol of running away instead of running towards something.

    my motto this year seems to be I Run To Keep From Running Away.

    Thank you for yet another connection :)

    Tc
    | Posted on 2012-08-20 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      
    Running is a great symbol of endurance, & I think that's what you've come up with here, your own personal will to get to your destination. Staying steady, determined, focused. But there is also that "without you" that lends a sweetness & longing to the poem, which gives us a the firm realization that it is the "you" that's at the heart of the running.

    & I really like the aspect of flailing. It brings to mind an imperfect runner, who is still be fully loved. & that's all we want, is to be fully loved.

    Makes me want to sorta cheer you on & watch you cross the finish line. :)
    | Posted on 2011-04-04 00:00:00 | by Santi | [ Reply to This ]
      it's almost like when we lost someone to death...we go through activities, mechanically, to take our mind off the pain we are feeling...

    running is like that, can do that...this time it is separation from a significant other...

    loneliness is my marathon...i am running with only the thought of you beside me...
    and eventually i am so in tune with the sound of my steps...i tune the thought of you ---eventually i am not just running but running towards you and the day we will be together again..it is the home stretch, and you are my home.


    "i'm ethiopian now" great line...

    i picture the long distance runner...running as if it is taking no toll whatsoever on him or her...but here...the toll is on the heart.

    i like the short, concise lines in this..they are like the strides of a runner...well paced.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-04-04 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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