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    dots Submission Name: elizabeth gave me an elephantdots
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    Author: Someones Epiphany
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 4454/2106/161
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    elizabeth gave
    me -an elephant in the room- status
    but i misunderstood

    days gain weight
    pregnant with anticipation;
    bloated with dreams:

    the promise of being
    he(a)rd
    once more far out-
    weighs any misconceptions
    of home






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      what an awkward, sort of guilty-feeling piece, like being oversatiated with thoughts, or food, or both. i like how it drags its feet across the floor, how you have to pull at it for it to move, the undercurrent of frustration that you can't really do much about... and i marvel at how seemingly simple it is. all in all, nicely done. or better word: solidly)
    | Posted on 2012-05-09 00:00:00 | by expiring_touch | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the "elephant in the room" status

    hemmingway---"hills like white elephants"

    there is something weighing heavy on the speaker's mind...something she wants to unload but can't for some reason...and her anxiety is starting to show...the way this whatever it is is affecting her...

    it's there ---and of course knowing your situation..could have something to do with the waiting...waiting for him...the expectations...the longing...the gut feeling growing...

    from what there is, this is what i see in this piece...

    something looming...something ponderous...and heavy.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-04-05 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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