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    Author: ShiveringFire
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    Conspiracy

    Silence is growing within these walls
    Thick--- it smells like freshly crushed Lilacs
    Heavy--- it is spreading into a fine mist

    And I feel sharks circling round me
    I can actually see their shadows on the walls
    I can see my own shadow too
    And I realize, I am only a bait
    Tied with artistic finesse, on a giant hook.





    Submitted on 2011-04-05 12:32:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So conspiracy makes you feel like a worthless piece of bait for sharks? That's an extremely good comparison.
    | Posted on 2011-04-08 00:00:00 | by Peacejoe | [ Reply to This ]
      the heavyness, the thickness spreading into fine mist..

    i am already disintegrating even as i hang here like bait, waiting for him to notice me...

    by the time he looks, i will be just a scent...

    nothing else left...and all of the words i wove to entangle him...consumed within my walls...

    we protect ourselves so hard sometimes...we just never let anyone bite...when the bite could be blissful.


    loved this.
    | Posted on 2011-04-07 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      sometimes being the bait can lead to new and exciting things. but i dont really think that, that was were you where leading with this. good write.
    | Posted on 2011-04-05 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhh yes indeed, we are all baited with hooks in this sea of life.

    A well written piece from you.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2011-04-05 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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