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    dots Submission Name: Brokendots

    Author: ShadowsnLights
    ASL Info:    25 f canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.24 - 71/107/66
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
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    As I lay here on my tear stained pillow, I watch the sky change outside my window. The birds in flight, the sun so bright...

    All of it means nothing to me...

    The very air in my lungs chokes me!

    Sleepless nights and lost appetites...

    Tomorrow, will not be for me.

    I don't want to breathe without you.

    I gave you my heart, ALL of it. Why did you throw it away? You said I was your everything, your life... You even said I was to become your wife...

    Was it all lies?

    These bitter tears burn my eyes...

    So much for "Forever And A Day. Always/All Ways. Across And Beyond Eternity."

    Submitted on 2011-04-05 17:50:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      love give colour to everything doesnt it?
    But life moves on..
    my favorite line is the first.. catches the reader straight away ..

    - Black Rose
    | Posted on 2011-04-09 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Seems you're right; your best works come out of terrible circumstances. We men are a fickle creature. =P
    My favorite line is "Sleepless nights and lost appetites..."
    I believe you will be fine.
    | Posted on 2011-04-09 00:00:00 | by Zai | [ Reply to This ]
      This is how I felt about my last ex boyfriend...All of this continued for years...then I realized I was stronger and better without him...and now were friends again...but I can never forget the pain he put me through so it helps me keep everything on that just friends bases :)
    | Posted on 2011-04-07 00:00:00 | by Bloodlust86 | [ Reply to This ]
      you should go buy one of your favorite treats, call a friend, try to forget about him. if he really did that then he is not worth the bother.

    why are men such jerks sometimes?
    | Posted on 2011-04-06 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]
      I recommend ice cream. Reading it, it kind of feels like a song. I think your poem needs more meat. I recommend beef. Good Luck on feeling better.
    | Posted on 2011-04-06 00:00:00 | by watereater | [ Reply to This ]
      Why last posting?????????????

    Believe me, i have been there too and know how it feels... oh my God... how it feels .. everything seems a lie

    i dont know what has happened with you but i can guess... i am not asking you to hate him, i am asking you to value yourself ... it will heal, it will be perfectly all right.
    | Posted on 2011-04-06 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]

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