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    dots Submission Name: confusiondots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    25/ DFW
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585/498/311
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsconfusiondots
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    im eating those words i said to you
    im changing the way im viewing things
    and the way the world turns is turning on me
    the days are to short for all ive got to do
    and i cant see myself in anyone but you
    but the time it ticks and im still alone
    still drifting, not catching on anything
    i wish i could go back in those years
    and rewrite the start of my book
    but i cant and i just have to play it out
    but these pages are slowly becoming to full
    and my heart is becoming to empty
    i cant seem to make things work
    and i cant seem to take my mind off you
    and everytime i change
    someone always says, i wish you could turn back time
    but i cant and i wont
    please dont tell me that you know whats best for me
    cause if you did and i dont
    then why arent things working out for me
    i guess this is just the way my heart bleeds
    and to tell you the truth dear
    im no longer a fan of the sentimental things.




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      I freaking love this! From the first 3 lines I knew this was gonna be good. Favorited!
    | Posted on 2011-04-08 00:00:00 | by Peacejoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I guess its strange how after a while it seems like we're just "playing it out" .. like we are no longer part of the plan..
    I think you were essentially confused when you wrote this .. because a lot of it is choppy i guess..

    don't lose interest in sentimental things

    - Black Rose
    | Posted on 2011-04-06 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]
      i can totally relate with this... you know what, things take time but they dont take a lot of time if we stop running away from the reality... escapism leads to nowhere... just take a deep breath and think, perhaps you are not ready for commitment or perhaps he doesnt quite understand you... still you care about each other, so things will certainly improve if you will let them...
    | Posted on 2011-04-06 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]


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