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Ave Maria

Author: Someones Epiphany
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Ave Maria

Ave Maria-
she means nothing to me
but i love her
for your sake
and for Jesus'

i went to work this morning
head in a spin
teeth unbrushed
and damn! i forgot to take the pill...

b r e a t h e . . .
(he's on the other side of the world...
the "7 day rule" doesnt apply]

Ave Maria-
she means little to me
but i love her
for your sake
and for Jesus'

four times this week she [Ave Maria]
has been playing on the radio
and every time it sounds new;
every time it makes me miss you; every time
it makes me smile at the number of times
i've been asked when we're having babies
despite our half world seperation

Ave Maria-
she mocks me
but i smile at her
for your sake
and for Jesus'

i'll remember the pill tomorrow...

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