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    dots Submission Name: Ave Mariadots
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    Author: Someones Epiphany
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 4454/2106/161
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAve Mariadots
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    Ave Maria-
    she means nothing to me
    but i love her
    for your sake
    and for Jesus'

    i went to work this morning
    head in a spin
    teeth unbrushed
    and damn! i forgot to take the pill...

    b r e a t h e . . .
    (he's on the other side of the world...
    the "7 day rule" doesnt apply]

    Ave Maria-
    she means little to me
    but i love her
    for your sake
    and for Jesus'

    four times this week she [Ave Maria]
    has been playing on the radio
    and every time it sounds new;
    every time it makes me miss you; every time
    it makes me smile at the number of times
    i've been asked when we're having babies
    despite our half world seperation

    Ave Maria-
    she mocks me
    but i smile at her
    for your sake
    and for Jesus'

    i'll remember the pill tomorrow...




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