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    Author: BestxDeceptions
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Kentucky.
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 25/66/49
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    You placed me down
    into my waters of pity,
    dabbed my cheeks and
    kissed my sorrow.

    My mind flutters and
    halts
    on your doorstep.
    Is it too late?

    If I said this is only
    temporary and that
    my mind sees only today
    could you deal with it?

    When apologies no longer
    solve anything, but desperation
    makes it worth it, could we
    compromise?

    This need that grips my
    being tells me stories of a life
    I never lived and kills the life that I'm
    living.




    Submitted on 2011-04-07 10:33:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      another amazing poem you've written. so much pain is put into your writing
    | Posted on 2012-11-17 00:00:00 | by Nessyjane | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is depressing
    | Posted on 2011-04-08 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]


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