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    dots Submission Name: Daffodilsdots

    Author: ShiveringFire
    Elite Ratio:    4.9 - 328/84/22
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1049
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       How to revive old porcelain..

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    Poor, old, bruised porcelain
    balancing the old scars with new
    with all the weight of time upon it
    cringes to see the sparkling fruit bowl!

    Dear porcelain,
    Does your sun brushed surface know
    you have cobwebs inside
    But dont worry i will clean you
    and fill you all with daffodils
    they will redeem you
    because daffodils are magical.

    I remember
    How he secretly pressed
    just one daffodil in my hand
    and we fell in love forever.

    Submitted on 2011-04-07 13:33:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awww!!!! how romantic! i have never been given flowers from one of my many, but i'm sure its very nice! " and we fell in love forever "
    i wonder, how it is that you know its love? i certainly cant tell! ( smiles )

    i cant resist smiling in this poem, for it is so pretty and romantic, and i have always been a sucker for romance.


    | Posted on 2011-04-09 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]
      I didn't want to review Necessary because I have personal reasons why I love that one so for this one I wanted to let you know in commentary how I feel about this.

    Lately I've been reading your poems, coming back to them a second or third time.
    I looove the theme of flowers and a daffodil is a powerful flower, even if it's just one or a whole field of them.
    One of the reasons why I admire it is because you use porcelain as a poetic cover.Porcelain's identity could be a soul in this.
    At the end the reader finds out that porcelain is not the literal meaning and a bright day is with this.
    Like two people, standing in a open land or plain .

    Then there is the meaning of the daffodil, which is love, respect, regard for rebirth or new beginnings.
    I love the meaning of flowers and the daffodil is so common because it has it's own language.
    I'm not calling them Narcissus because Daffodil just fits way better.

    There is always a particular flower that means something to two people.
    I find it odd we sort of came out with flower poems
    at almost the same time period.

    This ish is nice and I am favoriting it.No.Not because you faved mine but because I have the liking of it's value and sense I've gotten.

    I don't know every single thought or feeling that was in the rear of this and that's the line drawn of brain teasing for me.
    You give the clues but just enough and not too much and I like how you even it out when you do your love pieces.

    And so..I try to think further beyond the three stanzas of yellow inner joy seen by the beau.
    I wanted to dissect it but be accurate too.
    | Posted on 2011-04-08 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]

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