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    Author: Someones Epiphany
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    i.

    the saints are armed
    with safetly information

         "in case of emergency
         oxygen masks will
         fall from the panel
         above you"


    but they are much too
    selfless
    to attend to themselves
    before you



    ii.

    i took a photo of god once
    snuck into the holy of holies
    while no one was watching
    he was really obliging
    though the photo developing shop called him
    under exposed-
    nothing but a bright light
    in the darkness


    iii.

    walls of faith caving in:
    to your left - the madonna and child
    to your right - a crucifix
    on your knees, eyes shut tight
    begging for eternal peace
    or rest or recompense


    iv.

    life has no emergency exit




    Submitted on 2011-04-08 02:24:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This reminds me of the fight club plane seen a bit. When they are talking about oxygen and looking at the pictures if tranquil people whom are about to crash.

    That was a very jd thing unjust did right there.

    I think you typo Ed safely in the first stanza

    Other than that. Good peace. I definitely relate. I feel you. And that is what poetry is about. Right?

    The last line ties it all up. Very tounge in cheek this one. Borderline sardonic. Which is unusual for you in regards to the subject matter
    | Posted on 2011-11-02 00:00:00 | by leftof_red | [ Reply to This ]
       Someones Epiphany
    Yes, you are, as are your works. More than apt in every respect. You make me proud to be in the same species.
    (I am, right?)

    but they are much too
    selfless
    to attend to themselves
    before you

    Which is of course why they are saints.

    No graven image (it can't do justice)

    On the other hand Jesus said, "If you've seen me, you've seen the father". (Still no "graven" image)
    | Posted on 2011-04-08 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      i find sometimes that church is like a plane going down...i relate to this piece...

    i am very spiritual but a used to be catholic...just found too much conflict with their laws, with their behaviour....and really organized religion.in general..i don't know...lots of hypocritical stuff seems to pop up...lots of saying i'm a christian...but not showing it.

    this poem is maximum...the third part especially...just up there, you and god...and no emergency exit...just your life and how you have lived it..and how you have treated the other passengers on the plane...

    and i love the idea of the photograph...but "underexposed' like being underexposed to religion...we can't quite make him out, though we want to...
    and to me, much of organized religion is shoving a bunch of pictures of him into our hands trying to convince us that we need to be in the picture too..but then..maybe we would both be underexposed...

    even having said all that..i feel the spiritualness in this piece and for me it is very real.
    | Posted on 2011-04-08 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      life has no emergency exit...

    nope, it sure doesn't.

    the older i get, the more i realize that life is indifferent to how i feel about it. it just is. and it's up to me to choose which course i plan to take in experiencing it. i can do it the hard way. or the not so hard way.

    sometimes, in the midst of it, i find it's hard to have faith. i start to ask a whole lotta questions with very few answers. but someone told me once, most times the answer to 'why' is 'why not'. somehow, i couldn't argue with that logic.

    but i have been here, where your words are. i have been here. wavering. just wavering. trying to remember what that burning bush looked like.

    hang tuff chica. hang tuff.

    sometimes the reasons are quite surprising. yup.

    you are one of the strongest people i don't know.





    | Posted on 2011-04-08 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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