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    dots Submission Name: flowers in our roomdots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    25/ DFW
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585/498/311
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsflowers in our roomdots
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    its broken and dead now
    just like the flowers in our room
    the air is so stale now
    that all my words they cant get through

    i tried to show you just what i was feeling
    but all my emotion wasnt enough to reach you
    its hard when i still feel so alone
    cause in reality youve been here all along

    the truth is i still need you
    but my pride is saying fuck it
    you put me down and pushed me around
    im surprised im still stuck here

    i can easily walk out this door
    but im praying youll change
    i know its a fools game
    but ill wait baby, ill wait

    so give me a sign, anything would do
    cause its broken and dead now
    just like the flowers in our room.




    Submitted on 2011-04-09 19:04:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i know what he is doing to you,,, he is consistently and cyclically involving you and then evading you.

    He is splitting you from you.

    Intricate and delicate, you are a poet, not a fragile flower who will just wait there... abandoned.
    | Posted on 2011-04-11 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
      aww! this so so sad, sweet depressing and romantic! whoever they are, they probably dont deserve you!
    | Posted on 2011-04-09 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]


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