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flowers in our room


Author: scardnscared
ASL Info:    25/ DFW
Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585 /498 /311
Words: 138
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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flowers in our room



its broken and dead now
just like the flowers in our room
the air is so stale now
that all my words they cant get through

i tried to show you just what i was feeling
but all my emotion wasnt enough to reach you
its hard when i still feel so alone
cause in reality youve been here all along

the truth is i still need you
but my pride is saying fuck it
you put me down and pushed me around
im surprised im still stuck here

i can easily walk out this door
but im praying youll change
i know its a fools game
but ill wait baby, ill wait

so give me a sign, anything would do
cause its broken and dead now
just like the flowers in our room.




Submitted on 2011-04-09 19:04:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i know what he is doing to you,,, he is consistently and cyclically involving you and then evading you.

He is splitting you from you.

Intricate and delicate, you are a poet, not a fragile flower who will just wait there... abandoned.
| Posted on 2011-04-11 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
  aww! this so so sad, sweet depressing and romantic! whoever they are, they probably dont deserve you!
| Posted on 2011-04-09 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]


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