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    dots Submission Name: a list of demandsdots
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    Author: Someones Epiphany
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    to hold your hand
    to tell you about my day and how awful work was and what a control freak my boss is and how awesome my co-workers are and how i dont really want to go back tomorrow but we both know i will
    to cook us teemateem wot from scratch despite my western world packet opening comforts
    to frustratedly try and answer your amharic questionings knowing i know what i want to say but cannot make my brain formulate a response
    to wake up beside you knowing i am home

    this is my list of demands
    which doesnt feel like much to ask
    i have given you my heart
    but long to show you so, once more.




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      This is comforting and certainly relatable. Many of our desires in a relationship sound very simplistic when described, but it's the dramatic effect of what's felt behind the vocalized expression that is truly something profound.
    | Posted on 2011-06-08 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]
      Simple things can mean so much, can't they? & sometimes the plainest symbols are the strongest, like doves equating peace, hand holding equating love.

    "to cook us teemateem wot from scratch despite my western world packet opening comforts"

    That part especially made me smile, because it shows such trying. Not labored work, but that effort that a relationships can be, sort of opening yourself up to someone & who they are, what they are. To read it at a glance, it's describing a simple act, but there's so much more to it.

    My best friend decided that "home" is the most beautiful word in the english language. It took him years to decide that, but by then he had to redefine the word. "Home" became the word for the way his lover & the way he made him feel, & I have never witnessed such complete love as theirs.

    So yes, this is good. It feels right, like your frustrations & wanting are right. Sometimes we focus on the wrong stuff. & I hope that you get to show him more soon & that the showing of more is endless. :)
    | Posted on 2011-04-10 00:00:00 | by Santi | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the stream of consciousness style of this...

    almost like if i stop, i just won't get it all out...or may be afraid to say it...so it spills out like knocked over glass of milk...

    which i would like us to wipe up together.....

    there is such a "together" about this...

    two spots...4th line.."don't"

    and 7th line.."frustratedly try to answer"

    but yes, all those little seemingly insignificant things in our day...are important when it comes to discussing them with our significant other..
    that is what the end of the day is for...

    and when there is no one there..we feel like jumping out of our skin...we want someone to share even the most ordinary things with...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-04-10 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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