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World at it's Knees


Author: DiamondTears
ASL Info:    20/F/Wa
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 66 /109 /57
Words: 86
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Some new work :)


World at it's Knees



The world fell to it's knees,
I turned my head, to the open endless seas,
To the beat of a broken anthem,
Wrapped up in symbols, held randsom.

I couldn't fight the light, 
My mind caught in a fevered plight,
The pages ripped from fragile spines,
Like victims pulled from forced lines.

The world is lying on it's face,
Ripped like roots from the ground with haste,
I hope to see the sun of tomorrow,
Till then, I embrace the sky with sorrow.




Submitted on 2011-04-10 10:14:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Thanks for the comments! It means a lot to know people are reading my work!
| Posted on 2012-02-02 00:00:00 | by DiamondTears | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought the first stanza was your strongest that pulled me right in. The last 2 lines of the whole work are very powerful. "pages ripped from fragile lines." great creative work usage. Very impressed and the more i read it over and over the more i really do enjoy it. Now, for the meaning to me. The world like everything is a victim of entropy and was designed to break down as soon as it was created. That's the horrifying and beauty of life to me. Either at a spiritual center of physical shell we are all damaged and battered. So, i just figured embrace any emotion but treat it as a wave. You maybe angry but don't be anger let it flow through you and embrace it but don't hold on to it. We use emotion to experience this ride we call life we are not these emotions. A really enjoyable piece Thank you for sharing.
| Posted on 2011-04-11 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]
  i think the world has always been at its knees for us all .. begging us to embrace it

one note: you used the word ripped a few times more than i would've liked .. but thats just me ..

-Black Rose
| Posted on 2011-04-10 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]


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