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    dots Submission Name: ... love huhdots

    Author: robbie
    ASL Info:    20/m/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 53/54/36
    Words: 277
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       idk just a free write

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    dots... love huhdots

    its kinda sick being told that your loved

    then they go take you and shove

    when you need them no one is there

    hard to feel like any one really cares

    its just me and my son

    he is the only one

    with uncondisinal love for me

    that i can truely see

    i have to stay strong for him

    this mental fight i must win

    i dont want to fade im all he has here

    when the darkness creeps near

    he is the light that pulls me through

    thats somthing i always knew

    no matter what happens i have to be strong

    not for me but for him dont get me wrong

    im fighting for us

    but i feel like i got hit by a bus

    yet i still get up and fight

    i have to because thats whats right

    i wont let this keep me down

    wont give in to the satasfaction to frown

    this is what i have been delt

    and i know what i have felt

    time and time again over the yearsno way to count all the tears

    but what dont kill you makes you stronger

    to tell you the truth that person couldnt of been wroner

    it only makes you colder

    and years only make you older

    the trick to it all is not to die

    and not to cry

    thats what makes you in to what i must be

    now after all this that i can see

    Submitted on 2011-04-10 11:48:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the flow was... crunchy (te-he) i'm so glad your willing to that for your son, good job on the poem

    | Posted on 2011-04-10 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]

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