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    dots Submission Name: uhh free writedots

    Author: robbie
    ASL Info:    20/m/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 53/54/36
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsuhh free writedots

    time is our mortal enemy constantly in my face
    almost like its looking to race
    only you can never win aginst the clock
    time will keep going long after im dead as a rock
    the trick is to use the time givin to me
    to understand what i really must be
    but lost in side my head while time flys by
    trapped in the dark for so long i want to cry
    but there is one tunnel with one dim light at the end
    is this a message some one is trying to send
    some one trying to help me out of the darkness of this hell
    im jujst waiting to hear those victory bells
    demons rise in side my soul
    trying to excape thrugh that big dark hole
    withc lays where my heart use to be
    love is something i can no longer see
    i sit here and withe to free myself from this place
    looking in the mear i dont evern reconize my own face
    thise changes keep comming and comming

    Submitted on 2011-04-10 12:03:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thanks you every one
    | Posted on 2011-04-18 00:00:00 | by robbie | [ Reply to This ]
      A good write, on a sad subject.
    Keep looking towards the light, you can find your way, no matter how dark it seems.
    So keep writing and never let the nay sayers drag you down.
    | Posted on 2011-04-13 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree with black rose! although the typos i didnt notice! good job

    | Posted on 2011-04-10 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]
      you have a few typos there..
    but all in all it was interesting to read
    my first impression would be that time follows us all and change itself takes time.

    keep writing

    - Black Rose
    | Posted on 2011-04-10 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]

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