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    dots Submission Name: Nervousdots
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    Author: Little Gal
    ASL Info:    20 female, Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 469/431/94
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsNervousdots
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    Shivers flowing down the spine
    - as though from something creepy.
    That slowly moving cold drop of sweat
    - passing by eyes so focused, worried even.
    Palms dripping as they heat up
    - whilst hands are fanning away the heat vigorously.
    A sac of blood in the chest pumping
    - pumping too fast for normal.
    To that speed the eyes can only try to compete
    - as they run wild looking around.
    And it seems that not a breath is a around
    - not even your own.




    Submitted on 2011-04-11 00:12:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hi thanx for your comment on wildflower, your right about your coment love brings out many desires and disapointments in their life it can turn a personality into a beast thats gentle but yet so cruel a love like this i found twice in my life
    i liked your post for me i picture a person or an animal crippled and freezing to its death and it can see and feel itself die
    i liked the image i got it gave me a moments piece thanx that was good

    sandman
    | Posted on 2011-04-29 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very interesting. I have never read a poem quite like this before! Good job
    | Posted on 2011-04-11 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]


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