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a good one


Author: concrete_rose
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a good one



A vision setting upon grim,
its effervesance fading in the minds eye,
far and gone is the voice of recognition,
a scandal on the soul.

Persistant is the one whom knows guilt,
the conscience is bleeding heavily unto the floor of redemption,
untouched are the pleasantries of life,
far gone are happier times.

Thou whom is alone,
sits quietly in darkened rooms grasping to bottles,
dusty with layers of perplexity,
the wall clock is stuck at wondering-
where did the life go...

which was so promised,
the innocent times and the freedoms,
the people who once were so close,
now lay fleeting outside the window.

april 10 2011




Submitted on 2011-04-11 00:21:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Life is not meant to be wasted away in the bottle. It tends to rust in the face of such treatment.

Then one day, one wakes up and is suddenly conscious of the rust that has been heretofore painfully obvious to everyone else. A question is asked; "where did all that time go," and the answer brings guilt and sorrow and remorse. So begins the cycle of drown, wake up, down, up, and so on. But the cycle can be broken.

Others should not be judged on potential alone. Everyone has potential. But not everyone is able to live out that potential, or exercise it to its fullest capacity.

I spent a great deal of my life befriending people I felt sorry for. I had the best of intentions, but really ended up only hurting myself.

Hope I'm not reading too much into this.

There is a promise of talent in your words.

Take Care,
Erin
| Posted on 2011-09-06 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]
  When too much time is lost , by looking only to the past,
then only the dark will show it;s head,look for the sun ,saw last,
a good writing, with sad thoughts.
| Posted on 2011-04-13 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
  we all grow up and like you said the clock is stuck on wondering where did our lives go ...
I hope i didnt misinterpret this.. it was a bit confusing but i loved your choice of words..

- Black Rose
| Posted on 2011-04-11 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]


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