i never thought i would enjoy repetition so much!.. and the final stanza is truly unique in its hope, its self-assuredness, its finality. this feels like being in a long distance relationship, and I can totally relate. also thumbs up on the original use of (), it genuinely emphasizes the general awkward feeling of 'disconnectedness'.
Very nice piece. The imagery, and feeling are powerful here. We all live mundane lives for a time before we find that meaning we search for, but you must always remember that even the mundane can be beautiful.
this reminds me of a lily tomlin quote...she said they should take two New Yorkers who are walking down the street talking to themselves and pair them up. That way they would look like they are talking to each other.
we get so caught up in our own lives, sometimes it is hard to be together with another...takes effort, compromise, adaption..but i think you guys are doing that...
and soon...the mundane will feel fun because you will be doing it together.