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    dots Submission Name: onedots
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    Author: Someones Epiphany
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 4454/2106/161
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsonedots
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    the clock struck one
    it seemed like such a waste
    of effort
    the bell chimed its 12 bell tune
    to alert the world of
    another hour passed

         D      O      N      G      

    it hardly seemed worth
    paying attention
    though the bass of the
    bell reverberated in
    my heart

    one hour less
    one hour closer




    Submitted on 2011-04-11 23:52:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a decent piece, but i feel that it is unfinished. Sort of seems like you cut yourself off while you still had something left to say.



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    | Posted on 2012-01-25 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]
      is it me or time is relative? didn't einstein say something like that? how long is an hour? not 60 minutes... definitely not.

    how long is a year? i can truly attest that it doesn't equate to 365 days. how long is 200 million years? eventually, we will be space dust. but what glory will that be! like dinosaurs under the earth, rotting and turning into fossil fuels that propel our vehicles.

    anyway, felt like dropping by again. its quite nostalgic here in your posts.
    | Posted on 2011-07-05 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]
      One is the lonliest number that you'll ever know...

    but when it signifies that two can be together in one hour sooner...

    the conotation of the single chime....

    has a nice ring to it.
    | Posted on 2011-04-12 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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