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    dots Submission Name: Left All Alone Without My Lightdots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    16/male/spirit
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 116/171/203
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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    dotsLeft All Alone Without My Lightdots
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    Why can't I see...? Everything's dark. Turn on the light-please? Help me out of this darkness, so I will not stumble.

    Wait-why do I hear foot-steps? You were right by my side but now I see your shadow walking away! Please babe, wait!

    I thought you loved me...why have you left my side? And on top of that, I am without sight. I cannot comprehend any of my own sentiments, and most of all...I can't understand why you left me.




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      A classic lover's lament with the classic and always really unanswerable question: Why?? nice work penned straight from the heart I believe.... fine...
    | Posted on 2011-04-14 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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